The  fireworks are butefl as gold. the rockets are fast as lightning.    the   fireworks are   colourful  and dangerous  .   they  sound   is lik a whistl. the          colours  red  and  blue in the black .

3 thoughts on “Jaylen – The firework display

  1. I love the way that you are comparing the fireworks to things Jaylen, it helps us imagine doesn’t it. These are similes and are great to add to your writing. You do need to check your work for capitals and full stops though. Can you spot your mistakes?

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