The ferstweel was geting  fester and fester.

Theres a train. It is slowin down becos  people wat to get in the train.

Theres a man talking  to woumon.

Theres peole making sandcastles.

2 thoughts on “5SC Lara

  1. Good Effort Lara. Great use of capital letters and full stops in all of your sentences. I love your use of the conjunction ‘because’ it really extends your sentence. Maybe next time you could use some adjectives to describe what you are seeing.


  2. Well done Lara. 5 sentences and capitals and full stops. I wonder if you could think of different ways to start each sentence next time? Or add some description, there were lots of colouors you could have talked about.


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